This "full length" game could've had its play time cut to 1/3 if it wasn't for the lifeless hallways. Environmental design was also lifeless, cat food boxes everywhere, empty rooms and backwards facing trailers in the trailer park which were built on top of rocks? I'm not saying these things to be malicious, but with a little more life, fleshing out and engaging world this game would've been much more. The story, ambience and sound were absolutely amazing, but the environments and pointless filler hallways made me lose interest and have to struggle through to the end.
The plot was amazing, kept me guessing and on my toes. But to me, personally, it felt like a hallway simulator with a side quest of chasing a serial killer. Just a little more layout thought and love and i'd have 0 complaints at all. To me, walking through empty places shouldnt be added to make what couldve been a 20 minute game that long
I suppose so. I managed to make a 3 part series on this game, I cut out anything that was basically empty space. managed to get at least 40 minutes of content. But I tend to check out everything ahha
My emotions have been toyed with and my heart shattered. Incredible ending and plot twist, absolutely wild to me that you're only 16, like you're very, veeery good at stablishing an intriguing narrative, very excited to see what else you can come up with
Im gonna be posting a youtube playthrough here soon, but just wanted to say this game was phenomenal. The story and gameplay was amazing, and the twists were awesome.
Incredible game! First game I've played by you, and I watched the big boy Berlin play another. Keep doing what you do, and I would LOVE to voice act in one of your games, as I said in the video. Think about it :)
one of the best game i have played the story was so good the voice acting so also pretty good i don't have that many thing that i would like to say to this game, but in my opinion maybe it needed a little more horror like jump scare, or more dead body and little more action because we only get to shot one bullet in the hole game but that doesn't mean the game was not great it was actually one of the best story telling game that i have played in itch.io.
but yea like i said just a little more horror and jump scares and the game would be a lot more better and i give it a 8.5/10
I would die for Max, the goodest of boys (Carlos is a close second tho lol). Amazing job with this games, specially in making the characters unique and intriguing. And you definitely nailed the feel of being on edge all the time, the swears and trailer park had me extremely tense
WOW. Just finished your game and you really have talent for this. The only minor criticism i could put forth is that movement can be a bit slow, and paired with a lot of long hallways that can make some segments a bit of a slog, but thats really all i can say. The story was great, and i was impressed with a lot of the gameplay elements like lock picking and whistling to find the dog. Its clear you put a lot of thought into the game, and this doesnt just feel like another lazy indie game with jump scares. Really looking forward to what you come up with in the future!
Not too far in yet, but you've got me interested and it's obvious you put a lot of work into making it. Aesthetically, it's really well done.
My main complaints so far aren't too intense, but I do have a few:
1. If you're going to open a game up with a quote, it better be a damn good one. In the vast majority of cases where a visual work (game/film/ect.) opens with a quote it almost always comes across as tacky and leaves a bad immediate impression, especially if that quote is something you made up yourself (like this one appears to unfortunately be).
2a. Anyone saying "Oh, cool" would have been quite uncommon as it had only very recently entered into the counter-culture slang vernacular and hearing it said by any cop or detective would have been extremely unlikely.
2b. Besides that, saying "oh, cool" in any professional setting by a fresh hire torward any superior, especially upon first meeting them, would have been firmly looked down upon and viewed as disrespectful or give the impression that they were uneducated.
3. Nobody would have said "weird ass" in the 60's.
Incredibly impressive game! The story got so wild at the end and definitely did not expect what happened there. The characters were great and you got some really talented youtubers to VA them, made it so much better!
You have such talent for game creation, looking forward to whatever you make next :)
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This was amazing especially for 16 yrs old. HIT ME UP FOR A FUTURE VOICE ACTOR!!!
This is the final part of the series. The ending had me almost crying and questioning. The game was awesome, loved every second of it.
The second part, got really interesting, I enjoy watching the other youtubers as we notice a trend in how we are thinking.
This "full length" game could've had its play time cut to 1/3 if it wasn't for the lifeless hallways. Environmental design was also lifeless, cat food boxes everywhere, empty rooms and backwards facing trailers in the trailer park which were built on top of rocks? I'm not saying these things to be malicious, but with a little more life, fleshing out and engaging world this game would've been much more. The story, ambience and sound were absolutely amazing, but the environments and pointless filler hallways made me lose interest and have to struggle through to the end.
Some valid points. The plot kept me engaged tho.
The plot was amazing, kept me guessing and on my toes. But to me, personally, it felt like a hallway simulator with a side quest of chasing a serial killer. Just a little more layout thought and love and i'd have 0 complaints at all. To me, walking through empty places shouldnt be added to make what couldve been a 20 minute game that long
I suppose so. I managed to make a 3 part series on this game, I cut out anything that was basically empty space. managed to get at least 40 minutes of content. But I tend to check out everything ahha
This was by far one of the best horror games with a plot I have ever played well done! Part 1 of 3:
dx11. not dx11 (10.1)
Incredible work!!
Well, that was fun and twisted! :-P
Thanks Jordan, I'll be checking out some of your other stuff and very impressed you were 16 when you developed this one.
Part 3 Final Episode of my playthrough of The Final Pin. Absolutely amazing game!
This was a pretty suspense filled game, very well made!
Here's part 2 of the story! Still loving this game so much!
Here's part 2 of my playthrough of The Final Pin!
This game is absolutely amazing! I can't wait to play more!
My emotions have been toyed with and my heart shattered. Incredible ending and plot twist, absolutely wild to me that you're only 16, like you're very, veeery good at stablishing an intriguing narrative, very excited to see what else you can come up with
THIS GAME WAS FUCKING AMAZING THE STORYLINE HAD ME SO ATTACHED UP UNTIL THE VERY END!
Im gonna be posting a youtube playthrough here soon, but just wanted to say this game was phenomenal. The story and gameplay was amazing, and the twists were awesome.
this was a good game
THIS IS A ROLLORCOASTER OF EMOTIONS |THE FINAL PIN| - YouTube
Incredible game! First game I've played by you, and I watched the big boy Berlin play another. Keep doing what you do, and I would LOVE to voice act in one of your games, as I said in the video. Think about it :)
Gonna show you some love on Patreon as well!
one of the best game i have played the story was so good the voice acting so also pretty good i don't have that many thing that i would like to say to this game, but in my opinion maybe it needed a little more horror like jump scare, or more dead body and little more action because we only get to shot one bullet in the hole game but that doesn't mean the game was not great it was actually one of the best story telling game that i have played in itch.io.
but yea like i said just a little more horror and jump scares and the game would be a lot more better and i give it a 8.5/10
good game
I would die for Max, the goodest of boys (Carlos is a close second tho lol). Amazing job with this games, specially in making the characters unique and intriguing. And you definitely nailed the feel of being on edge all the time, the swears and trailer park had me extremely tense
Good game
WOW. Just finished your game and you really have talent for this. The only minor criticism i could put forth is that movement can be a bit slow, and paired with a lot of long hallways that can make some segments a bit of a slog, but thats really all i can say. The story was great, and i was impressed with a lot of the gameplay elements like lock picking and whistling to find the dog. Its clear you put a lot of thought into the game, and this doesnt just feel like another lazy indie game with jump scares. Really looking forward to what you come up with in the future!
What a fun story about a descent into obsession and madness
Not too far in yet, but you've got me interested and it's obvious you put a lot of work into making it. Aesthetically, it's really well done.
My main complaints so far aren't too intense, but I do have a few:
1. If you're going to open a game up with a quote, it better be a damn good one. In the vast majority of cases where a visual work (game/film/ect.) opens with a quote it almost always comes across as tacky and leaves a bad immediate impression, especially if that quote is something you made up yourself (like this one appears to unfortunately be).
2a. Anyone saying "Oh, cool" would have been quite uncommon as it had only very recently entered into the counter-culture slang vernacular and hearing it said by any cop or detective would have been extremely unlikely.
2b. Besides that, saying "oh, cool" in any professional setting by a fresh hire torward any superior, especially upon first meeting them, would have been firmly looked down upon and viewed as disrespectful or give the impression that they were uneducated.
3. Nobody would have said "weird ass" in the 60's.
This game is so well done. I didn't expect it to be this long. The visuals and story are amazing. And I didn't expect that ending tbh ⊙ˍ⊙
Incredibly impressive game! The story got so wild at the end and definitely did not expect what happened there. The characters were great and you got some really talented youtubers to VA them, made it so much better!
You have such talent for game creation, looking forward to whatever you make next :)net hier aber sind sie schon der Johann Religion (Sekte) beigetreten!
damn that cool
BROKEN THROUGH is a good game, but this story is great. but i have to say.. this game takes 2 hours.... but is a great game, thank you.
THIS is definitely your best game by far, Jordi! Well done... Kinda bittersweet with the ending, though haha :D
Great game! Loved the music and the look, basically everything about the game! I was not expecting that ending at all. Great game!
I loved this game! It was amazing!!